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i. i want to make your heart
bleed and laugh and cry and
smile and feel instead of just
yawning from lack of love, but
i'm afraid being around you
makes me too empty to do so.


ii. i'm sorry. it hurts
too much to explain.


iii. go to sleep. i'll be here when you wake up.

except you weren't. you lied, and you left.

and i'm afraid to go back to sleep because i didn't even get to say goodbye.


iv. i think i'll be
like the city of
atlantis and pull
a disappearing act
out of your life.
sort of an experiment with different styles.
sort of not happy with it.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I don't see why though. :love:
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:iconfl4l:
FL4L Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
i'm happy with it and like a catrillion other people are to so be happy =D greaty poem!
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
i'll try to be.
thank you, as always.
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:iconfl4l:
FL4L Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
you welcome as always =D XD
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Scribbles1337 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009  Student Photographer
They're Amazing.
I Wonder What They Would Be Like If You Were Just Experimenting.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
thank you. =]
i was mostly experimenting.
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:iconitsxmagik:
ItsxMagik Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
iv is incredible.
The style is a little different, but you did really well with it.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
the style drove me insane.
as did ending on an even number.
but thank you.
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:iconitsxmagik:
ItsxMagik Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
You're welcome - you don't like even numbers?
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
i do and i don't.
i don't like ending on even numbers.
but i don't mind them in general.
i'm odd. i like things to be uneven. unable to be split apart evenly.
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:iconitsxmagik:
ItsxMagik Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2009
I like things like that too.
It's such an... odd obsession.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2009
it is odd.
but interesting.
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:iconitsxmagik:
ItsxMagik Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2009
Very.
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:iconcrazy-deedles:
Crazy-Deedles Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
I think you've had better styles, but I still love the message this sounds out. I think this style could be very effective though when you get the hang of it, it's always good to experiment with your style :D
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
thank you. =]
i'm trying to figure out what my style wants to be.
and this certainly wasn't my best.
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:iconcrazy-deedles:
Crazy-Deedles Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
But it's often that when you start something new your not 'the best' at it, but even so I think that when you finally find that style that you can fit into it'll produce some of the greatest pieces yet :D You could clearly have a career in this, I hope your able to pursue your passion the way you wish :)
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
you just made me so happy. :hug:
i'm thrilled you think i can have a career in writing.
i want one so badly. it's crazy.
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:iconcrazy-deedles:
Crazy-Deedles Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
Well, have you submitted your work to magazines or anything? I'm sure that you would get an exceptence letter form somebody, your just over-flowing with talent :D I'm glad I could make you happy ^^ :) I'd like a career in writing but I'm not much of a poet, I'd like to write novels myself. If I saw that you had something published I'd go out and buy it (asuming I could a. find it and b. have the money lol) :)
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
i submitted a few poems to teen ink's magazine.
one of them got published. =] but i don't really
want to be published in a magazine, i'm a bit picky.
see, i want to have my own book. i'm thrilled that you
would buy it. =] if you couldn't find one, maybe i could
mail you one? idk. i think you could do wonderfully writing novels. =]
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:iconcrazy-deedles:
Crazy-Deedles Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
Well, what I've heard is that it's not 'easier' to publish but it certainly makes your chances of getting published go up if you have had your work published in the past before, and I think that magazines are a good place to start with that, but I understand your picky-ness about the subject, I would be choosey too. How long do you want the book to be?
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
i know, it'll be hard to publish an entire book. i'll be willing to submit work to magazines and be published in them, but the kind of published i want is my own book. i don't really care about the length. =]
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reicheruofthedesert Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
i love number iv, it reminds me of when people say you've done a houdini
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
yeah. =] kind of sort of almost.
thanks.
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:iconreicheruofthedesert:
reicheruofthedesert Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
sometimes when people or things dissapear, someone sometimes says "it/he/she did a houdini!"
your welcome :heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
yeah, i know. :heart:
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:iconpagesofdreams:
PagesOfDreams Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009   Writer
Wow. :wow:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
:heart:
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:iconanyimacielgray:
anyimacielgray Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
this is this is this is

aslflaksnflas.

understand?
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
you are you are you are

alfkjdlfkjxakflkj!

understand?

(i had to steal it from you, sorry.)
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:iconanyimacielgray:
anyimacielgray Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
(it's okay. i completely understand.

poets are like that.)

<3
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
(yeah. yeah, we are. glad you understand.

:heart:)

p.s. we should totally do a collab someday.
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:iconanyimacielgray:
anyimacielgray Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
(i probably really maybe possibly do.

which is difficult unless you're a poet.) [:

ps. heck yes!
i have a list of people i promised
to do collabs with. i should
probably start contacting those people. D:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
(so true.
i'll say 'yes and no' in response sometimes.
people look at me odd.
must be a writer thing.)

p.s. yes you should!
i have one person i need to collab with, other than you.
but i have to start it so i'm D: failing epically.
and i promised someone like two writing pieces.
haha.
epic fail.
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:iconanyimacielgray:
anyimacielgray Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
(it is our civic duty to be confusing and ambiguous!)

ps. i know.
i'm lazy.
my major failing. D:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
(it is!
i love our civic duty.)

ps. yeah, me too.
lazy.
procrastination.
causes fail.
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kittykatangel Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009
Your experiements always turn out so well.
I love them.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009
haha, i'm glad you think so. =]
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:iconthecoalminecanary:
TheCoalMineCanary Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
The first and last parts are my favorite.
But I really do like the whole thing.
:heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009
thanks. :heart:
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:iconthecoalminecanary:
TheCoalMineCanary Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Of course.
:heart:
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:iconanaliese:
analiese Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009
I like your experiments. A lot, actually.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009
thank you. =]
they're always fun to do, even if they turn out weird.
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:iconanaliese:
analiese Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009
Weird = :heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
you = :heart::heart:
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:iconmidnightincarnate:
midnightincarnate Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009
I really like it; it's wonderful.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009
thank you.
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:iconletsdrawblood:
LetsDrawBlood Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009
the last stanza was a great allusion. [i cant spell].
the story of atlantais has always intriguied me. [again, no selling skills].
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009
thanks. =]
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:icon1nazzy:
1nazzy Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009
i like the way it turned out. lovely :)
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009
thank you. =]
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