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are you listening?

one.

the trains are
burning. planes are
crashing, and i can only hope
they're not yours.

tides are coming in,
breaking the shore, carrying
the ground beneath you
away, away with them,
and we can only

watch.

but see that guy over there?
he's laughing.


-

two.

there are voices
inside my head, pulling
at the roots of my hair and
banging on the walls,
begging me, screaming at me:
'please, let me out',
'please hear me, hear me,
hear me.'

-

three.

until they're all i can hear,
until i want to give in and
give up, and they've won, they've
won, until i feel like the ability

to live life fully is a dream, a hope, a
something meant only
for the lucky, until
depression fills my lungs, and
i need a new source of oxygen, and

-

four.

oh, god,
i can't breathe.

-

five.

tell me it'll be
alright. please. just lie
and say

it'll be alright.

no.
.
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:iconjust-raymichael:
JUST-RAYmichael Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2011
love it.
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:iconbluesnowgiesha:
BlueSnowGiesha Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009
another tie for first :]
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009
:hug:
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:iconbluesnowgiesha:
BlueSnowGiesha Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009
^-^
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:icontell-talexheart:
TELL-TALExHEART Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009
oh, you write wonderfully. This poem is amazing.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009
thank you.
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:icontell-talexheart:
TELL-TALExHEART Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2009
you're welcome.
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:iconalicewonderstar:
AliceWonderStar Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009
I love it....it is freat and so perfect for my mood right now...
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009
:hug:
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:iconalicewonderstar:
AliceWonderStar Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009
I added a couple new things from my Myspace blog...thought more people would read it here...TeeHee.
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:iconafterinfinityends:
afterinfinityends Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2009  Student Writer
planes are crashing.
let's hope they don't fall on us. :thanks:
this poem,
it's really beautiful.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2009
i hope they don't.
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:icondevelindiskies:
develindiskies Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2009
love this!
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
The italics are so breathtaking.
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:iconchibi-shuriken:
Chibi-Shuriken Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Five is beautiful. :heart:
Is it lying if I just pretend it's all right?

:hug:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
i'm not sure.
i hope not.
because then i'd be a liar.

:hug:
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:iconchibi-shuriken:
Chibi-Shuriken Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
i hope not too.
but at least we can be liars together.

:hug:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2009
yeah.
it's always easier when you're not alone.

:hug:
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:iconchibi-shuriken:
Chibi-Shuriken Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Good point.

:hug:
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:iconi-like-sushi:
i-like-sushi Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
this is so very profound. :heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
thank you. =]
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:iconi-like-sushi:
i-like-sushi Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
anytime. :)
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:iconfl4l:
FL4L Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009
Nice poem allysa...i don't know if that's how you spell your name...well anyway good job
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
thanks.

p.s. it's spelt alyssa. =]
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:iconfl4l:
FL4L Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2009
sorry that's my neices name and spells it the wayu i did =D
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:iconitsxmagik:
ItsxMagik Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009
I love this. And I LOVE how you split up three and four.

:heart: Beautiful poem, as always.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009
i love how you caught that.

thank you, as always.
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:iconitsxmagik:
ItsxMagik Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009
You're welcome, as always.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
love this. i think you only know how to write pure awesome.

"the trains are
burning. planes are
crashing, and i can only hope
they're not yours."

:heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009
nah, i don't.
i just guess and hope i get it right.

:heart:
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
sure, sure.
that, or maybe you're just insanely talented. :heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
:hug:
maybe you're insanely sweet.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
or maybe i'm just insanely honest :heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2009
along with sweet. :hug:
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2009
:glomp:
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:iconlala-lolllipop3:
lala-lolllipop3 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
oh, stunning.
i've missed your poetry.
[when i was too lazy to look at the deviations in my inbox.]
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
haha, thank you.
[i'm too lazy to look at mine, mostly.]
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:iconlala-lolllipop3:
lala-lolllipop3 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
you're welcome.

i've been putting off replying to my messages for a few days also, until now.
i hope nobody thinks i'm dead. XD
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
i'm lazy when it comes to replying to my messages.
they tend to sit in my inbox for two days.
it's sad. D:
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:iconlala-lolllipop3:
lala-lolllipop3 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
same with me.
or at least recently, it's become that way.
poor, poor messages.
i should stop neglecting them so much.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2009
i should stop letting mine pile up.
it's awful of me.
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:iconlala-lolllipop3:
lala-lolllipop3 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2009
i finally got around to answering mine. =)
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:iconatomicalyssa:
AtomicAlyssa Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
this is so pretty; i loved the emotion in it! :hug:

one critique: i think "alright" is supposed to be "all right"
but i only read this in english class in a very biased book. so who knows? haha
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
:hug: thank you.

i think it's supposed to be 'all right', too.
but 'alright' feels more... correct. it feels like it fits more, to me.
it's a weird personal thing, i think.
but thank you.
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:iconatomicalyssa:
AtomicAlyssa Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
haha i know the feeling(:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
i'm glad you understand. =]
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:iconwei-teng:
wei-teng Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
"the trains are
burning. planes are
crashing, and i can only hope
they're not yours."

i especially like that bit.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
thank you. =]
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:iconmt84:
MT84 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2009
very good, i really enjoyed it thanks
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
:heart:
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