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my mind replays
memories of us
each night, and

i am lost, lost

lost

in the shadows of
your eyes, the curve
of your almost-smiles,
the lullabies in your
voice, the sound of
your footsteps.

don't wake me up
just yet.

.

i told you that
i would change, that
i'd paint the sky violet
for you, that i would

miss you, and i could

catch you a rainbow,
or a heart beat,
or star, or a smile,
or whatever you want,

but 'whatever you want'
was not me, and

i was never enough
to make you stay.

.

all i ever wanted
was for you to say
'i love you',

but i guess
some things
are better left unsaid.
©2009 ~Amertie
:iconamertie:

Author's Comments

this doesn't feel like me, at all.

and suggestions and critique are always welcome.

Comments


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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
:heart:this is lovely, but sad.

--
you were the fire in my eyes,
but i wanted to put you out.
:iconcrazy-deedles:
This does not seem like you at all Alyssa
Granted it's still good (stars will stop shining when I see your work as anything but)
It just has a much more hopeless feel then it normally does
It's the truth though
Some things are best left unsaid.
Even when you want them to be said.

And of course, per usual, I read aloud again ^^

--
I'll play you like a marrionet...
:iconxxladouleurexquisexx:
it is different but its still crazy good & a little sad...
:heart:

Its true though that somethings are better left unsaid

--
I have loved to the point of madness;
That which is called madness,
That which to me, is the only sensible way to love.

Francoise Sagan
:iconunstellastique:
brilliant.
heartbreakingly sad.
but i adore it. :heart:
:icondarkkizz:
very sad.try to write about a different theme. maybe .. hope?

--
poco es tanto cuando poco necesitas
:iconcolormehappy19:
This is beautiful. As always.

--
rain flow to the roots
rain drench my boots
rain douse the flame
rain forget this poet's name
:icontriggerxperfect:

that's really beautiful.
:iconcrashartist:
Didn't get the first comment this time :)
No, this doesn't feel like you, but it's still pretty heartfelt and emotional, something that seems to be missing from a lot of poetry

--
I love you
I truly do
:iconquieten:
"but 'whatever you want'
was not me, and

i was never enough
to make you stay."

my favorite line. simply beautiful.


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