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i. have you ever been so hungry that, when food is finally ready and it's burning hot, you're not willing to wait?

because i want to love someone like this. love someone so much it doesn't matter if i get burned. love someone so much that it just. can't. wait.

i want to love someone so much that i'm not afraid anymore. not afraid of the consequences, of getting hurt, or of losing myself. i want to love someone so much that it's consuming and i can do nothing but love, love, love.


ii.  sometimes, i wish i didn't have so many shots at a decent future. sometimes, i wish the only future i could ever have would be in writing. maybe then people would leave me alone to chase my passion.

[i hate this about myself. i hate that i can't just be grateful for what i have. i hate this secret.]


iii. i worry that one day, when i call up a friend, she'll answer the phone and ask, 'who's speaking?'

i'll say, 'alyssa.'

she'll ask, 'who?'

my greatest fear is being forgotten.


iv. when i can't think of anything to write, i think of you. i think of who you are and who you aren't and what you mean to me and what you don't and never will.

the only problem?

i have no fucking idea who you are.


v. i like to think luck hates me. because it does.

and five is my secret lucky number.
my favorite secret:

xl. rofling gives you carpet burns.

[this is nonfiction.]
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:iconthe-photographicpoet:
the-photographicpoet Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
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FedersStrich Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Great done!:clap:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Mm :hug: :heart: :giggle:
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Chibi-Shuriken Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I want to love like that.
Again
But this time I want the world to know it.

And if anyone could make a living out of writing, it'd be you. :heart:
Don't let the future possibilities pull you from passion

I've tried
It only hurts
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Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
i'm guessing the first one didn't work out,
so i hope
the second one does.

:hug: i hope so.
i'm trying not to.

i think it would.
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Chibi-Shuriken Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you. :heart:

:hug: i hope so for you too.
stay strong and don't let them interfere.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2009
:hug:

i'll try to.
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:iconchibi-shuriken:
Chibi-Shuriken Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
I'm glad to hear that.
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briannamal Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Absolute love!
One of my favorites of yours ever. :D
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009
oh, wow.
thank you. =D
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intrinsic21 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2009  Professional Photographer
Wow I love the raw emotion, the rigid honest. Just beautiful. I truly connected to the writer. I felt it...
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2009
ohhh, thank you.
i'm so glad you could connect. :heart:
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:iconintrinsic21:
intrinsic21 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009  Professional Photographer
You're very welcome! Your work is wonderful!
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:iconfl4l:
FL4L Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
rofling gives you carpet burns lol i love that lmaoing make you loose your butt O.O great poem btw! =)
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
yeah, it does. =]
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:iconfl4l:
FL4L Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
=^]
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lovephysics Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
i hate to say it, because i feel so unoriginal when i do, but i can be the same sometimes.
if by sometimes i mean always.

<3 also, i think i won`t be forgetting you or your writing anytime soon.
ps. reminder to myself to check the piling up deviations. 133 unchecked and counting! haha.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
nah, i'm glad that someone's the same.
i'm glad i'm not alone.

:hug:
thank you. that makes me feel better.
ps. i'm sorry. i submit a lot. xD
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lilfairydanzer Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
that kind of love is possible. ive experienced it. :) unfortunately it kind of takes over your life.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
how'd it turn out?
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:iconlilfairydanzer:
lilfairydanzer Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
oh its still turning.
together for 3 years, apart of four, during which there were a few affairs, and now the flame is rekindling...

sometimes i think it will never end.
but i can't figure out whether that is a good or bad thing. :/
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
ohhh.
well, good luck to the two of you.
i think it might be a good thing?
but i'm not sure.
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tarumi Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
Beautifully written, great job :+fav:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
thank you. :hug:
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:iconitsxmagik:
ItsxMagik Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
I really like this piece.
The first part stands out most to me, because it's what I want too.
Excellent writing.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
thank you.
i hope we find our someone.
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:iconitsxmagik:
ItsxMagik Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
I think we will, someday.
(There's that someday again!
I'm wondering when someday will come.)

You're welcome. :heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
someday might be today.
or tomorrow.

:hug:
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:iconitsxmagik:
ItsxMagik Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
Or the day after that.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
or the day after that.
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:iconitsxmagik:
ItsxMagik Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2009
Or the day after that!
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2009
or today.
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vampire-amara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
ii. sometimes, i wish i didn't have so many shots at a decent future.

^ love this line
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
haha, i'm glad.
ii. was the hardest to write by far.
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:iconvampire-amara:
vampire-amara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
turned out great! :glomp:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
:hug:
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isabelle3933 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
i really like this piece, but i don't know if its possible to love someone like that.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
i think it is.
i hope so.
=]
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WriterM Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
This is great, wish i could make my won like this. The pure emotion of this is beautiful
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
thank you. :heart:
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:iconargo602:
Argo602 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
This is too negative and mindless!
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GwenavhyeurAnastasia Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
Excuse me? Where do you get the right to say this? Do you even know Alyssa? I highly doubt it.

People like you are awful. You don't know why she wrote this, or who she even is. Yet you think you can make remarks like this to her, about her writing, which she has worked hard on. A lot of it is personal for her. You have no right to dump on any of it as you have.

She is so far from 'mindless', it isn't even funny. You are the one that is mindless. To make a comment like that to her, on her own work.

You didn't even give reasons for why you did not approve of her poem. You just dumped on it, making you seem like a complete idiot and a jerk. If you're going to not like someone's work, at least explain why not. Maybe leave some constructive criticism, you thoughtless fiend. That might be too much for your pea-brain to handle, though.

So next time, just shut up unless you have something to say that actually took some thought, that made the writer feel like you were just trying to help her improve her work. Which is what Alyssa wants. She doesn't mind thoughtful critique. No true writer does. But what you said is just useless, rude, crude shit.

Your comment just seems like you were trying to degrade her, and that will get you nowhere other than for people like me, who know her and care about her, to jump all over your foolish ass for being so rude and thoughtless.

So please, shut the hell up with these mindless comments, and learn to actually think before you speak.
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Argo602 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
Why put anything on a public forum, where you are open to criticism, good or bad? Not everybody is going to instantly love what you do. My comment is just the thoughts of one person. The only foolish person is the one who believes everything that is said about them. What gives you the right to try and stomp on someones thoughts? Without bad and good criticism we will just be stuck in mediocracy!
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GwenavhyeurAnastasia Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
The problem with your comments is that you didn't give her any criticism or critique. You just proclaimed your opinion that it was awful and left. There is nothing wrong with critique, in that you are correct. My point was that your comment wasn't critique; it was rude and childish. So if you have a problem with someone's work, you should say something helpful as well instead of just dumping on their work, as you did, thoughtless troll.
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:iconargo602:
Argo602 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
I say what I think ,just like you!
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:icongwenavhyeuranastasia:
GwenavhyeurAnastasia Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
But you could have done so in a less rude manner. All that your comment seemed like was an effort to demean the writer, which is inappropriate. Maybe you should try to find a more respectable, mature way of saying what you think?
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Argo602 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
I'll take your advice and try to put my thoughts in a nicer way. If you ever visit my gallery feel free to say what you realy think!
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GwenavhyeurAnastasia Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
Thank you. I'm glad this could end semi-well. And believe me, I will.
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Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
aw, thank you. you made me laugh. =]
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littleboylogic Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009  Professional Writer
iii. i worry that one day, when i call up a friend, she'll answer the phone and ask, 'who's speaking?'

i'll say, 'alyssa.'

she'll ask, 'who?'

my greatest fear is being forgotten.

---

Things like this make me remember how easy it is to cry. Writing that evokes emotion is the only that's worth written, and so I thank you.
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