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confusing stars for satellites by ~Amertie:iconAmertie:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


i dream of your arms
around me, in empty hallways
lit by nightlights like dreams, imagine that

your breath would be like raindrops, maybe,
and i'll be the river
into which they fall, and i'd catch you,
lightly, i promise

we won't make a sound,
like mice on christmas eve, tiptoe across
holly staircases, tiptoe
on lakes, dance and watch
the moonlight shadow our
reflections, dance

around my dreams, in them,
and find that i would
fax you a smile, a rainbow, a
sunny day, even
my heart -

and yes, it's yours,
but only if

you hold me.
©2009 ~Amertie
:iconamertie:

Author's Comments

title is from if everyone cared - nickelback.
just because i was listening to it as i was writing this
and now it reminds me of you, like everything else seems to.

and you're the only thought in my head,
and somehow this seems fragile, it seems fragile,

don't speak too loud or the secret will break.

[i've been driven insane, forgive me.
and yes, this style is different, and i'm not sure if it's me.
is it a crime to say i kind of like this?]

Comments


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~Neyla25 Jul 8, 2009, 2:16:45 PM
Lovely. :heart:

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Don't make a sound, shh, and listen; keep your head down, we're not safe here.
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*BakaChi Jul 8, 2009, 2:18:30 PM
Really pretty, I loved how it flowed. You always get that down so well, but it seems different in every poem, hehe. <33

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Well, damn.
:iconamertie:
~Amertie Jul 8, 2009, 2:19:27 PM
i'm glad it seems different. <3
it'd be a bit boring if it wasn't, wouldn't it? =]
:iconbakachi:
*BakaChi Jul 8, 2009, 2:21:44 PM
Aha...not boring at all. Just..comfortable? I think that's the right word. I mean, I always get a lot of different imagery from reading your poems, so it's kind of like going to a new place everytime you read something. But if you read something similar, it feels like your re-visiting a place...or something, ahaha.

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Well, damn.
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*xoxoraybaybay Jul 8, 2009, 2:25:05 PM


it would be a crime to say you didn't.

this is, by far,
one of my favorite things of your's.

it's absoloutely lovely.
i hope whoever this is for will be able to read it one day. because i don't know how anyone couldn't fall in love with your words.
they're almost as beautiful as your heart is.
<3
:iconamertie:
~Amertie Jul 8, 2009, 2:26:57 PM
:heart:

and i'm glad it is. =]
that means a lot to me.

and they will read it, haha.
it's not nearly as beautiful as i'm sure your heart is, though.

thank you. <3
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~RushAndRuleIt Jul 8, 2009, 2:30:59 PM
The imagery here is good, especially the part about faxing a smile. It lends warmth and personality to a cold piece of office equipment, and there's a special joy there.

--
If you were the last person on Earth, how beautiful would your artwork be?
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