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you will be drawing circles in the sand when he finds you.

'why are you bothering to draw in the sand?' he'll ask. 'the waves will only wash your circles away.'

you'll finish the circle by writing love in the center, then you'll stand up to answer him, hair in your eyes from the wind and sand on your face.

'because maybe it won't get washed away,' you'll say. 'isn't it a chance worth taking?'

and instead of laughing at you like you expected, he'll smile. 'yes,' he'll say. 'oh, yes.'

--

you will be weak with lack of sleep, drowsy and stumbling, and he'll catch you before you run into the wall.

'go away,' you'll tell him. 'just go away.'

'no,' i don't think i will,' he'll say. 'want me to tell you a secret about you?'

'no,' you'll murmur bitterly, but that won't stop him.

'see, you have this dark view of love and hearts,' he'll say. 'for one, you don't believe in love, or the fairytale happily ever after kind. because it always gets washed away, doesn't it? that's how you see it. but, somehow, you still believe it's a chance worth taking.'

you'll stare at him, amazed thatt he figured out this part of you. but he's not finished, not yet.

'and for two, you hate hearts. you hate how they break,' he'll say. 'you think everyone's heart has a do not disturb sign on it, and you have no idea how to take it off.'

'you're wrong,' you'll say, still somewhat shocked.

'am i?' he'll ask.

'yes,' you'll reply. 'i don't hate hearts. i just wish someone would take that sign off of mine, and then off of theirs.'

he'll smile. 'give me a chance, and i think i can do that.'

--

you'll have your first kiss. it will be in winter, under the falling snowflakes and on that bridge over the frozen river.

he'll catch a snowflake in his hand. 'do you want it?' he'll ask.

you'll shake your head, lost in thought.

you'll think that maybe, like falling snowflakes and winter and drawings in the sand, this will get washed away; end.

but maybe, just maybe, it won't.
this is ~desear's christmas present, because she's an amazing person and wonderful friend.
[she told me she wanted something hopeful.]

i hope she likes it. =)


p.s. uhm, this feels weird to say.
but please don't be afraid to comment. i love reading all of your opinions, and i like getting to know my watchers/readers. =)
i promise i won't bite. much.
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:iconitsonlylife:
ItsOnlyLife Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2010   Writer
love this.
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MissWriter Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2009
Wow. I am struggling for words to comment here. I can relate to it personally and you made it even more so with the use of second POV. This is wonderful. I think we all hold on to that hope that it will never get washed away and that if it does, we will be able to cope with it and have someone remove the 'do not disturb sign' again.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2009
yes, exactly.
thank you, again. :heart:
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:iconmisswriter:
MissWriter Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2009
You're welcome! :D
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:iconimnother:
imnother Featured By Owner May 17, 2009   Writer
I love this. :)
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner May 18, 2009
:heart:
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hidedont-seek Featured By Owner May 8, 2009  Student Writer
this is really beautiful and lovely and hopeful! I really like it :D
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner May 8, 2009
thank you. =]
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SuperTaate Featured By Owner May 5, 2009  Student Writer
Oh, wooooow... this is so lovely. I'm lost for words... well, kind of, but again, i'm at that point where i'm stuck and i don't know how to properly tell you how much i love this.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner May 6, 2009
aww, thanks. :hug:
doesn't 'i love you' work okay?
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:iconsupertaate:
SuperTaate Featured By Owner May 6, 2009  Student Writer
Okay...

i love you. ^^ 'cause this piece of writing is seriously amazing.
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pineacus Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
Ow, this.. Yeah, speechless. Lovely, beautiful, insanely.. stingy? But not in the bad way, in a you-read-my-mind? kind of way. Different from the ones I've read so far from you. Somehow.
(Yeah, I'm doing an investigation in your gallery, hunting my inspiration and getting awed by your mind. I want to write again, but I've lost the key to that door. I have a feeling that you have it. At least you've been opening that door in a sneaky kind of way lately.)
:heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
ahhh, that makes sense.
it felt different to write.
like getting the good out instead of the bad, for once.

[ahhh, i'm. beyond honored, really.
i hope you find your inspiration. :heart:]
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pineacus Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
I have a problem with that. I mean letting the good out, I don't know how to do that. Not used to it.

Well you're just amazing like that. :heart:
I think I'm on to it. :hug:
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Simply-Autumn Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2009
I like it when you write hopeful things. They make me smile =]
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TheWeirdandWonderful Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2009
From what I've read in your gallery so far (not much, but I only stumbled across your work about twenty minutes ago XD) this is the first thing that gives a chance of hope.

And personally, that small ray of hope in this poem gives me hope... But everything working out in the end, maybe it will, maybe it won't.

Although the poem suggests that the two might be happy together, it still hasn't ruled out the chance of things ending, which is depressing, but so... real.
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Amertie Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2009
yeah, it is the first really really hopeful thing.

well. at least they still have a chance.
it's not over yet. so they can still be happy.

i don't believe in 'happy ever after', though.
not the fairytale kind.
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TheWeirdandWonderful Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2009
Yeah, but if "happy ever after" does exist, then it must be pretty tough to reach
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koos-tall Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009
nawww that's so cute
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009
thank you.
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ibanez-acoustic Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
Your writing is very emotional. And very honest

I think this is the writing that can save people
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Amertie Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009
:hug:
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:iconmistyvision:
mistyvision Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009
i love the hope embedded into this piece. :heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009
i'm glad you do. =]
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NoTeLii Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2009  Hobbyist
I think I fell in love with u , ur writing and especially THIS :heart:
You touched me .... wuuhhh xD xD
I really , really like it =)
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Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2009
awww. :hug:
thank you!
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unstellastique Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
i'm not sure if i commented already,
if i did OH WELL. TWO TIMES THE LOVE?

but this is amazing. and totally worth reading over and over again.
i love it. tonsss.

:heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2009
TWO TIMES THE LOVE IS GOOD.

:heart:
thank you.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: I think you totally nailed it right here :)

I love the descriptions and imagery.

These are the circles,
Held up by sand,
Waiting for someone
To come find them.

But alas, the waves
They wash up the shore
Wiping away all the memories
Leaving only sadness
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anyimacielgray Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
aslkdlasknfalsfggd.

COMMENT.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
asflklxlkjlkjlj.

(for writers, our words fail us an awful lot.)
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:iconanyimacielgray:
anyimacielgray Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
(but of course.

we're poets.

this is allowed. because we make the rules.)

[:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
(we break the rules, too.
we break our own rules.
i wonder why we bother to create them.)
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anyimacielgray Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
(yeah, we do.

because we want the outside
world to think that our poet
world has some semblance of
order. i think.)
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
(possibly.
or maybe we like to pretend our world has order.
even if it doesn't.)
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:iconanyimacielgray:
anyimacielgray Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
(we're good at that pretending thing.)
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
(aren't writers usually?)
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ChiOkami Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009   Photographer
it's so hard to leave a comment...when it leaves me speechless.
it sounded very hopefull, one of my favorites by you!
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009
haha.
thank you, then. =)
hopeful is fun to write.
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toosexyformyshirt Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
how can i possibly comment if your work makes me speechless? :(
but i commented now, just for you =D
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
:heart:
aw, that's so sweet of you.
thank you.
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siowish Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
'want me to tell you a secret about you?'

simple, but it struck me.
maybe I'm just odd.
or you're too awesome.
most likely both but yeah.

<3
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
aw, thank you. :heart:

maybe it struck because you'd love someone to tell you a secret about yourself?
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:iconsiowish:
siowish Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
yeah maybe.
I guess I'm waiting for someone special.
that would know me more than I know myself.
=]
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
aw, well.
i'm waiting for him, too.
=)
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:iconsiowish:
siowish Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
daww.
let's wait together.
x]
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
that'll work. =)
there's a whole group of us, haha.
:heart:
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:iconsiowish:
siowish Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
heheh.
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Aislin-Sedai Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
This one does give me hope :) Thank you.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2008
i'm glad it does. :)
and no,
thank you.
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