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1.
press fireflies to
dirty ribcage, pulling
night's promise closer.


2.
make music
on lake surface to close eyes
to reflections.


3.
you are a lullaby
i sing
to sleep.


4.
i hear your voice
in the whisper
of waves.


5.
fingernails scratch
demons
in mind.


6.
autumn's snowflakes fall,
touched by wind; ground is a blank
canvas to their shades.


7.
mascara    prints       dawn pillows


8.
whispers
among ashes:
i'm here


9.
october scent
found in leaves, hidden
among letters


10.
yellow rubber
skims the surface;
quack quack.


11.
tiny prints
and children's laughter
speckle shores.


12.
wax   tricked  -  becomes      puddles.


13.
a confession:
night screams
only for you


14.
a cry, a flash;
feathers lie
scattered


15.
ribcage's music
rocks
the treetops.


16.
bubbles
litter sky
pop


17.
needles
tickle
feet awake.


18.
red lights
sprinkle the street
with rain.


19.
thorns
prickled with
flames.


20.
chimes are bass
in nature's orchestra,
played by wind.


21.
splashing water
cakes mud
between toes.


22.
late night
thunder
sparks.


23.
age
wrinkles brown
petals.


24.
morning voices
shout
down hallways.


25.
letters
rock
in ocean's cradle.


26.
fingernails tap
at glass -
goodbye.


27.
rain drops
on silent porch
step.


28.
stadium lights
faces of strangers.


29.
music spills
into waiting
dawn.


30.
a few words
and trust
stolen.


31.
webs glitter
under porchlight
critters scatter
so. this is for =Iscariot-Priest's July Haikuthon [go here for details].

will update this daily.
but i won't spam your inbox with the updates.

i know. well. pretty much nothing about haiku.
so, i'm hoping i get at least decent by the time this is over.

i'll love you forever if you help me.

[and before anyone asks.
no, most of these won't follow the 5-7-5 rule.
please don't suggest me to change it unless you think it'll help the poem itself. i'm not one for format if it's restricting.]

finally finishedddd.
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:iconthatsparklystalker:
ThatSparklyStalker Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013
i actually have an active dislike of haikus. This literally flipped my opinion upside down. 
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
stanzas 1, 8, 9, and 13 are my favorites<3. lovely images
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Casey-Wirrwarr Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2009
:heart:
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Amertie Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2009
:hug:
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Casey-Wirrwarr Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2009
:hug:
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Away-From-Me Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2009
13 could/should be a poem in itself. :heart:
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Amertie Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2009
i'll think about making it a poem, then. =]
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Sepulchral-Roses Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I love 'em all...they're all little bits of illumination =)

Oh, and may I ask - if not the five seven five, then what format did you use? (I think there's a three five three, but I know next to nothing about haikus lol)

:heart: 25 - 30. They're really awesome.
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Amertie Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2009
thank you. =]

and i'm not using a format. haha.
i've read a lot of essays that agree that format isn't what matters, it's the brevity.
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Sepulchral-Roses Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! =)

Yeah, brevity is something that truly marks a haiku (and it's also "the soul of wit"!) >.< I'm no good at being brief. Well, yay for being witless!
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